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October 10, 2018

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Brian, thanks for pointing out the poorly written "Vision." I await an explanation of what "an environment open to all" means. The "Mission" is just as bad. First it talks about city services "enriching the lives ... of residents." Say what? Even worse it goes on to state that the services "enrich ... the quality of our environment and neighborhoods, and the vitality of our neighborhoods." Your high school English teacher would have given this writing a C. Is there no one at the City of Salem who knows how to write?

Jim, it’s not that they don’t know how to write as much as that this style of writing is designed to be ocular Xanax, a soothing balm that calls up no particular concrete image in the reader’s mind, but rather just creates a warm impression.

See George Orwell’s “Politics and the English Language” for as clear an analysis of this writing as there could possible be.

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